Finally! We have finished the safety part of our cycling session with Constable Joss, now we can get into some real action, YEAH! I’m whizzing through the course at lighting speed. I can feel my bike wheels start to lift off into the atmosphere. I hit the jump and I think, “I believe I can fly,” and before you know it I’ve hit the ground, and I’m just about to hit the other ramp, but I have to stop because Constable Joss is fixing the ramp.
I pull the brakes and have to STOP! Then i’m ready to go again around the turn trying not to spin-out, criss crossing around the cones over the bumpy ladder, then stop. Waiting for my turn, waiting, waiting even more waiting and a little bit of chatter. Finally, it’s my turn, I go round the turn, up the ramp, round another turn, up another ramp, a little bit of criss-cross, then over the bumpy ladder, then it’s over again.
I bump into everyone and crash my bike left and right, which is very difficult to avoid doing. I can hear the people who are just finishing their lap going “that was so fun! I can’t wait to do that again!”. Just a couple of bikes to go “I FEEL LIKE A SUPERSTAR” criss-crossing, turning the corner, speeding up the ramp, around another turn, up another ramp, around another turn, criss-crossing, wobbling on the ladder sounding like the bike is going to break then stop. That was fun and I can’t wait to do it again.
Hi Blake I just read your story about cycling and it is very interesting. I like how you included present tense and made your writing very descriptive. I read over it twice and there is no past tense so you done a good job with your present tense.
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DeleteHey Blake I like your story about cycling. I read it over and it is in present tense. I like how much detailed you put in it good job.
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Hey Andrew, thanks for the kind, thoughtful comment.
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Blake
Hi Blake, It's Deakyn here from Awahono School. I really like your Cycling post, it is amazing. Maybe next time check the first part of your first paragraph because you could've added in a full stop in there. I like this post because you explained what you were doing and it made me feel like I was actually there (even though I was.) I also liked it because you completed your goal of using present tense. I hope I can see more posts like this because this was amazing. Please visit my blog sometime and comment on some of my stuff that I have.
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Deakyn
Hey Deakyn thanks for the comment, I will be sure to check out your blog and post a comment on it.
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